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英语作文:My Best Friend

时间:2017-4-20 11:23:26

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  陈传光 男,35岁,中学一级教师,现任教于江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学,从事教育教学工作11年。江苏省教育学会会员,连云港市优秀教育园丁,赣榆区优秀班主任,赣榆区先进教育工作者,赣榆区教科研先进个人。曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖,班主任基本功大赛区一等奖。有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表。“十二五”期间3个市级课题已经顺利结题。
  Hello, everyone!My name is Xu Qing. I study at Luoyang Middle School. I have a best friend. Do you want to know something① about her?
  Janet is my best friend. She is very lovely and pretty. She is thirteen years old. Her birthday is on 3rd October and she was born in Nanjing. She lives with her family. She’s 1.60 meters tall. She has black hair and two big eyes with glasses.
  Janet likes eating dumplings, chocolates, peanuts and vegetables. She dislikes pork, sweets and green tea. She loves playing badminton and listening to music. Her favourite is drawing, because she likes all the different colours. It is fun to look at the pictures when she finishes draw② them. The Dragon Boat Festival is her favourite day. She wants to be a doctor when she grows up.
  This is my best friend. I wish she is happy every day and I hope we will be best friends forever.
  江蘇省赣榆县罗阳中学八年级(2)班 许晴
  1. 优点:
  这是一篇描写人物的文章。文章描写了小作者最好的朋友Janet。小作者从年龄、生日、外貌、爱好、梦想等方面对好朋友进行了详细的介绍,从字里行间不难看出小作者对好朋友的了解之深。文章结尾处,小作者表达了对好朋友的良好祝愿,并抒发了希望两人永远是好朋友的美好愿望,升华了文章主题。
  2. 需要修改的地方:
  ①something改为anything。something通常用于肯定句中,anything用于问句和否定句中。 ②draw改为drawing。finish doing sth.意为“完成做某事”。
  3. 评分:
  按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准,本文修改前可得18分。

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